A War Without Lucy
In 1913 17th of December a young girl named lucy went out to check the mail and found a letter to her brother she ran inside and gave it to her brother Toby what is this Lucy said?
It's a letter for me to go to war Toby said with excitement Toby,said Lucy what happens if you don't make it back ‘what do you mean said Toby i'll make it back trust me after all this is what I have been training for and it will be a fun adventure for me.
The day came by it was now 1914 28th of July the day that Toby goes war. It only seemed like yesterday I gave Toby his letter Toby came into my room and said bye I started to cry a little I don't want Toby to die I hope he will be safe. So we said our goodbyes and as Toby set sail in the boats I had a feeling he wasn't going to survive.
It's now been two years I am now thirteen I haven't heard anything for Toby in the past year I hope he is ok. As I thought about Toby I realised there was still about three years before I see him again.As I walk out to the mailbox hoping for a letter from Toby I heard mum calling me. I run inside and mum hands me a letter in big letters it says FROM TOBY yay he's alive I say to myself.
It's now 1918 i'm now fifteen I only found out today that Toby comes back on my 17th birthday. I made some fruit cake to send to Toby it's sould get there soon well I hope. All I want for my birthday is for Toby to be home.
It's now 1920 Toby comes home tomorrow yay I can't wait it's my birthday as well,It's 9 pm I better go to bed. Me Mum and Dad got up at 6 am and started to walk to the wharf. I could see the boats drifting in slowly everyone was cheering and waving I was starting to get excited it's been 6 years since I have seen Toby. As the boats pull up I try to look for Toby but I couldn't see him what happens if he died.
Half an hour later no sign of Toby as I walk off crying someone comes up behind me and gave me the biggest hug of my life I turn around I couldn't believe my eyes It was Toby. You really think that I would miss your 17th birthday said Toby I'm sorry I didn't get you a Present ,yes you did said lucy what is it then says Toby with confusement having you home safe is all I wanted for my birthday and guess what I got what I wanted.
Kia ora Sara.
ReplyDeleteAllow me to introduce myself. My name is Katipa, I am a year 7 that goes to Paihia School. I really liked your story about a person named Toby going to war. This was very well written and had good punctuation. But was this a recount or narrative?.
This reminds me of how much I miss my papa, dad, and nana because they are in heaven. It might not be the same as war but it still reminds me of them.
I thank you for sharing this amazing piece of writing in your blog to show others. Hopefully you make something like this again but next time better tell people what kind of writing it is so they don’t get confused.
Ok it’s my time to go now and once again I thank you for sharing this story. Keep up the good work!