Underwater City
It's a giant city in the deepest and darkest part of the sea The buildings are taller than the Auckland sky tower. It's got a big clear dome the size of the city over the city The view from the city looking into the dark blue sea is so cool. you can see the bright colored fish swimming round and you can see seaweed as tall as a door moving like jelly in the water.
The house in the city are three stories and there are colourful cars that float on top of the roads. The amount of happy people in this city is amazing.In this city happy kids run around laughing and having fun because They know that this city is awesome and safe.When it gets dark lights come on that are as bright as lightning and the building are bright colours so people will see it.
By Sara
Hi Sara like you work it is good.But next time you could re-read if it missing full stop,capital letter and small letter.
ReplyDeleteHi Sara,I like your work It was cool and amazing.Next time try re-read your story and have a look you are missing some capital letters,full stop and some comer and try to look there a some words that doesn't need to be a capital letter but it need to be a small letter.
ReplyDeleteHi Sara My Name Is Ruby. I like your work because you used descriptive words and it made your piece of writing interesting. Maybe next time remember to use capital letters, full stops and only use capital letters for names of people, places or names.
ReplyDeleteHey Sara, this is a very creative story. You may have over used the word city though. I think it would be very cool if their was an underwater city, what would you name it ? Thanks for posting this.
ReplyDeleteHey Sara, this is a very creative story. You may have over used the word city though. I think it would be very cool if their was an underwater city, what would you name it ? Thanks for posting this.
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